Him & Her.
You & Me.
He likes her, you like me.
He wants her, you want me.
Sounds pretty good, a perfect fantasy.
But you both like her, then who likes me?
Nobody it seems.
But I like you, why couldn't you have liked me?
Now this is all a tragedy.
Why her when you had me?
I know now, it was always here & never me,
I wasn't good enough-why couldn't it be?
Hey! Good poetry but it would be a good idea to work on your spelling. Also, try to avoid using the same word too often. 'See' is used twice and so it becomes less effective!
ReplyDeleteGood luck on your journey of blogging :-)
Heey, Thank you for the constructive criticism I really appreciated it :)
ReplyDeleteI tried editing it a bit so I'm hoping it's better.
Thank you!
No problem! :-)
ReplyDeleteIt's a homerun for me now!
Ohh I like this. I can feel the emotion in it, and those are the best to read! Looking forward to more.
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